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As another day passes by
While the line of time continues
The dawn of this fate fades away

Reaching back to times gone by
Ghosts of days out of reach
I toil to read as words fade

What in this world can I not grasp
What in the past did I fail to see

Show me what you can see
Take my hand, enlighten me

If you perceive me as a mound of hate
Don't let go, don't be afraid
Somewhere in here there might be hope

For who I am, and who I am
Could not dissent more ...

Do I strive, do I sleep
Do I ask, should I weep

Teach me how to grasp your soul
Show me out of my commotion
Show me how to feel emotion

Help me find my way to life
Get me to the starting line
Give me something and in return

You'll be forever in my heart
You'll have your everlasting wish,
I'll be here through the turmoil
Both yours and mine, through thick and thin

Though be warned, if you notice
Do take heed, for this is final
Your last chance, my decision nigh

Or should I creep, dither back
Reatreat from callous misempathy
The world that fails to count me in
Would never notice, never grieve
©2004-2009 ~Tene
:icontene:

Author's Comments

This is probably the most inspired poem I've written.

This also marks my end to dedication to emotional poetry as a singularity.

Not a single thought was given to structure, rhyming etc ...

It's one of those "trance" ones. Just drift off ... writing ...


This forfills what I set out to do with poetry - express myself.

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:iconaphanter:
The poem is amazing... the words that you used couldn't have been better. You expressed yourself very well and displayed your feelings without confusion, wich made the poem straight foward to your point....
Great job and keep it up.

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.::We are what we create::.
Boricuas! --> ~ArteDePuertoRico
:icontene:
Thank you - nice to know I'm heading the right way style wise ... I appreciate your input a lot.
:iconhumantm:
i love it man, your words are so deep its like you could jump in and get lost in the page, swimming with the letters...



note to self: stop being wierd.
:icontene:
Heheh, what are you, tripping on acid? :P

In seriousness though, thanks.
:iconunknowndarkness:
I love this....I'm gunna have to fav this one too. I just love the way you write! :clap:
:icontene:
Hehe ... Too kind, too kind :)
:iconraynou:
ur poem is real good, but i also like ur pic, i dont know it just is soo cool......

hang on isnt bow street in london?????

or is ma geography really buggared up?

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two little angels, all dressed in white, tried to get to heaven on the end of a kite, but the kite string was broken, down they both fell, they tried to get to heaven but they ended up in hell!!!!
:icontene:
Thanks ...

There is a Bow Street in London, but I live on the west coast.

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